On the first point, I never had any problem understanding the original construction, because it's obvious that "he" refers to <Lasker>.

<Lasker published the proposed conditions, 11 which Capablanca said were unacceptable in a private letter to the champion.12 After Lasker had published a commentary on the conditions in the press, 13 Capablanca sent him another private letter asking "But why should <<<he>>> not play me on the same terms that he has granted to all other aspirants for his title?">

That said, I think your idea here is an improvement-

<A possibilty is to say "issued a statement to Dr. Lasker" instead of "sent him another private letter">

I don't think it's necessary to expand this further by explaining the name and role of the intermediary.

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On the second point, I think that

<The winner will be the first to get 8 points, draws not counting. If nobody reaches this goal, the winner will be the one with the most points after 24 games.>

I think we should make both changes, the first one:

<After Lasker had published a commentary on the conditions in the press, 13 Capablanca issued a statement to him asking "But why should he not play me on the same terms that he has granted to all other aspirants for his title?" 14> (should there be a point behind " and before 14?)

and also

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heh-"space" not "point." And no there shouldn't be so I filled it in, thanks for spotting the error.

Maybe you know "point" means "period at the end of a sentence" in French.

But in Quebec we pronounced it "Pwaaanght" and really loud too.

Anyways I made both edits you requested.

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Thanks also to <Ohio> for spotting the "Queen's gambit" and to <Daniel> for so quickly fixing it to "Queen's Gambit."

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<Steamed Team>

And here's what I did in our Profile, and will continue to do- list "Promoted draft", keep the mirror, and then list the new WCC Page beneath it, as here:

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You're never annoying.

"Promoted" means it's now an official page. Here is our first official page:

Steinitz-Gunsberg World Championship Match (1890)

Don't work on the actual draft we made labeled "promoted"- that's just for our archive, since it contains tons of valuable data we, or anyone else, is welcome to use in the future.

So don't work on a "Promoted Draft" like this one here, because it's finished and now turned into a Princess: Game Collection: WCC: Steinitz-Gunsberg 1890-1891

<Tim> this here is the draft we are going to promote next, so it's probably the most important to work on at the moment: Game Collection: WCC: Lasker-Capablanca 1921

I have to go to Canada on Feb 8, so I won't be submitting this draft to <Daniel> for "promotion" until a few days after that, at the earliest.

So there's plenty of time to check everything out before we submit it.

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<Later, he spent time in the USA to finish his education, but left college in 1910 and concentrated more fully on chess.>

"Later" is not needed since we can assume he didn't go to college earlier...heh.

We might want to include the name of the college (Columbia?)

For example:

I like <BOOMIE'S> sentence better, but isn't there an Edward Winter Chessnote saying that no actual academic records exist of where, and when, exactly, that <Capablanca> attended college in the US?

On the other hand there is a photo of him on a college baseball team.

If he played baseball at Columbia, he was in good company. That was Lou Gehrig's alma mater.

C.N. 6378, Link: http://www.chesshistory.com/winter/...

<In 1904 Capablanca entered Woodycliff School in South Orange, NJ.Y>

<In C.N. 3333 we added that in 1906 Capablanca was attending Groff School, 228 W 72 Street, New York.>

<Capablanca’s university record (he was a non-graduate in engineering in the Class of 1910, although we are not sure exactly when the course was broken off) is mentioned on page 134 of the Columbia University Alumni Register 1754-1931 (New York, 1932)>

So perhaps we may change

<Later, he spent time in the USA to finish his education, but left college in 1910 and concentrated more fully on chess.3>

to

Excellent work pulling in the relevant <Chessnote 6378>.

I added that to the mirror, where it will now be forever at everyone's fingertips.

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I think your latest sentence with a slightly altered <Ohio> suggestion added makes for the cleanest and clearest version yet- I particularly like the actual name of the University, with proof at hand to back it up too:

<He went to the USA to finish his education, but left Columbia University in 1910 to concentrate more on chess.>

Will the Kazaks, Uzbeks, and Armenians know where Columbia is? My version succinctly says the same thing with the added bonus of showing that CU is in NYC.

Adding the "more" qualifier:

Yep, this is much the best so far, in my view:

<"He attended Columbia University in New York City but left in 1910 to concentrate more on chess.">

Beautiful English.

I suggest <He went to the USA to finish his education, but left Columbia University in 1910 and concentrated more on chess.>

While I agree that <to concentrate> sounds nicer, content matter more than style. In this case, the formulation <to concentrate more on chess> implies that this was his motivation to leave Columbia University without a degree. So we would need a reliable source to corroborate that. I'm not sure if this is worth it, as then all the footnotes would have to be changed.

Furthermore, as the USA is mentioned, is it necessary to make clear that the CU is in New York City? Is there any other CU in the USA? I thought about adding that he went to New York State to finish his education (instead of USA in the above statement), but the Woodycliff School is in New Jersey.

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I'm going to put your decision in the mirror now:

<Furthermore, as the USA is mentioned, is it necessary to make clear that the CU is in New York City?>

Capa was encourage by the utter demolition of Marshall in their 1909 match. That told him he was a top ten player at least.

I'm not sure Capa loved chess. I've read that he played because he was good at it. He loved the idea of being successful at something.

<WCC Editing Project: Are you from England, by any chance?>

Pip, pip, and all that rot.

We don't need to assume anyone knows or doesn't know about <British Columbia University>.

1. It's not relevant to this draft which city it's in.

2. Anyone who wanted to find out where, or what, it is for that matter, could Google it in .013 seconds.

It's not worth interrupting a currently fine sentence to include the <New Yawk> information.

One punter's opinion.

To cite Capablanca: <[...] my love for the game had become a passion.> (that's from source <"2>, after the brain doctor said that the young Jose Raul should be prohibited from playing chess.).

But this is not to the point anyway, as we shouldn't guess why he left CU without a degree. But guessing is all we can without a source for what his motif was. A source would be a statement by Capablanca or a close associate, clearly saying that he left CU for chess. Without that, it is a mere guess. And I seriously doubt that introducing a hypothesis like <possibly to concentrate more on chess> would be an improvement.

I don't like the "more" at all. We're talking about Capa, after all. As mentioned in the groundbreaking book "Cultural Literacy", an author must ascribe to the reader <some> level of familiarity with the topic under discussion.

<He went to the USA to finish his education, but left Columbia University in 1910 and concentrated more on chess.>

He went to the USA to finish his education, although he left Columbia University in 1910 and pursued a career in chess.

He went to the USA to finish his education, but left Columbia University in 1910 and focused on his chess career.