<Freiburg> instead of Freiberg (according to page 151 of the 1934 'Neue Wiener Schachzeitung') or is there another source? Freiburg (im Breisgau) is the larger city and it is also also located closer to Baden-Baden, Pforzheim and Stuttgart, while Freiberg is in Saxonia. Or does the Alekhine book really state Freiberg?

<Baden-Baden> instead of Baden Baden http://www.baden-baden.de/de/

<Bad Kissingen> instead of Kissengen http://www.badkissingen.de/de/index...

Perhaps <In the years after Bogo-Alekhine 29> instead of <In the years since...>?

Dr. Max Euwe

former World Champion Jose...

<In the fall of 1933 both Capablanca and Alekhine were in the United States, but the champion reported that he was "indisposed" to discuss a rematch with the Cuban.>

Champion. And "indisposed" needs a source, doesn't it?

<The British Chess Magazine>

Will this be italicized? Maybe indicate with ''

<At present, Capablanca could not arrange the funds.>

This sounds a bit strange to me (but it could very well be correct), that "At present" refers to the past - maybe <At that time,...>

<Bogoljubov had arranged a purse of $6,800 to be paid Alekhine should he win, and $5000 should he lose.>

$5,000 instead of $5000 ?

<Games 1-3 were played in Baden Baden, 4-5 in Villingen, 6-8 in Freiberg, 9-10 in Pforzheim, 11-12 in Stuttgart, 13-15 in Munich, 16 in Bayreuth, 17-18 in Kissingen, 19-20 in Nuremberg, 21 in Karlsruhe, 22-24 in Mannheim, and 25-26 in Berlin.4>

see above

<According to The Neue Wiener Schachzeitung>

if <The> then <the> as the english definite article is not part of the name. Again, 'Neue Wiener Schachzeitung' and 'American Chess Bulletin' will be italicized?

<The British Chess Magazine seemed somewhat less optimistic about the potential quality of the match, predicting that "With all deference to Bogoljubow's chess strength, it is difficult to imagine him testing the holder to the utmost.>

It is not necessarily implied that the quality of games needs to be low, even if the contestants are of unequal strength.

<By game 17, with the champion>

Champion

<and Bogoljubov's play: :>

Thank you so much!

Point by point:

PART ONE

<<Baden Baden, Villingen, Freiberg, Pforzheim, Stuttgart, Munich, Bayreuth, Kissengen, Nuremberg, Karlsruhe, Mannheim, Berlin> <Freiburg> instead of Freiberg (according to page 151 of the 1934 'Neue Wiener Schachzeitung') or is there another source? Freiburg (im Breisgau) is the larger city and it is also also located closer to Baden-Baden, Pforzheim and Stuttgart, while Freiberg is in Saxonia. Or does the Alekhine book really state Freiberg?

<Baden-Baden> instead of Baden Baden http://www.baden-baden.de/de/

<Bad Kissingen> instead of Kissengen http://www.badkissingen.de/de/index... >

City names changed to what you said.

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<Perhaps <In the years after Bogo-Alekhine 29> instead of <In the years since...>?>

My gut is wanting to keep "since," but let's wait for <Ohio> on this?

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<Dr. Max Euwe >

I have been discussing this with <crawfb5> and we think that the use of any non chess related titles is anachronistic- and that the anachronistic aspect outweighs the positive aspect of retaining the original contemporaneous convention on this issue. But we can still argue about it further.

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<former World Champion Jose... >

I cut out "the" and it now reads <former world champion Jose...>

<crawfb5> and I were looking at the html versions of the drafts and we don't think the capitalization template we agreed upon works. We both think it looks better with as little capitalization as possible. Again, this is consistent with more modern convention- frequent capitalization looks a little anachronistic. We can still argue about this more.

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<<In the fall of 1933 both Capablanca and Alekhine were in the United States, but the champion reported that he was "indisposed" to discuss a rematch with the Cuban.>

Champion. And "indisposed" needs a source, doesn't it?>

Reference note added

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<<The British Chess Magazine>

Will this be italicized? Maybe indicate with '' >

<<At present, Capablanca could not arrange the funds.>

This sounds a bit strange to me (but it could very well be correct), that "At present" refers to the past - maybe <At that time,...>>

I think "at that time" is better so I changed it.

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<$5,000 instead of $5000 ?>

I think that's better also, I changed it. We need to make that change on <crawfb5's> draft also.

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<<Games 1-3 were played in Baden Baden, 4-5 in Villingen, 6-8 in Freiberg, 9-10 in Pforzheim, 11-12 in Stuttgart, 13-15 in Munich, 16 in Bayreuth, 17-18 in Kissingen, 19-20 in Nuremberg, 21 in Karlsruhe, 22-24 in Mannheim, and 25-26 in Berlin.4>

see above >

Fixed

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<<According to The Neue Wiener Schachzeitung>

if <The> then <the> as the english definite article is not part of the name. Again, 'Neue Wiener Schachzeitung' and 'American Chess Bulletin' will be italicized?>

Fixed to "the." We have to wait to decide on the other issue.

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<<The British Chess Magazine seemed somewhat less optimistic about the potential quality of the match, predicting that "With all deference to Bogoljubow's chess strength, it is difficult to imagine him testing the holder to the utmost.>

It is not necessarily implied that the quality of games needs to be low, even if the contestants are of unequal strength.>

Quite right. I changed it to read:

<The British Chess Magazine predicted that "With all deference to Bogoljubow's chess strength, it is difficult to imagine him testing the holder to the utmost.">

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<<By game 17, with the champion>

Champion >

See above, but we can still argue more about it.

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<<and Bogoljubov's play: :>

One : too much>

Fixed!

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Typically, one is a man at 18. I can't think of anything better, certainly not "child", "boy", nope, "adolescent", shudder, but that catches my attention.

<Marshall was usually more successful in tournaments than match play, and the Lasker match was a disaster for Marshall, who failed to win a single game. >

I know this one has been batted around, but I don't like it. I can't quite explain why, but let me meander through it:

I don't like the failure of the word "and" to connect 2 similar thoughts. The first clause makes a statement that is a fairly common characteristic of chess players, and describes a generally true statement about Marshall's career. The second clause describes a "disaster", a particularly extreme example of the tournament vs. match play issue mentioned in the first sentence. Therefore, I think the sentence needs more of a connection than the simple "and". Here's a first try with 3 missing words, and even at that I'm not totally thrilled with it:

Marshall was usually more successful in tournaments than match play, and the Lasker match was a(n) (1)______ (2)_________ (3)________ of that. It was a disaster for Marshall, who failed to win a single game.

Mix and match ideas:
1. especially particularly typically

2. glaring frustrating galling irritating vexing

"Disaster" was one of the few holdovers from the original introduction. It seems as good a term as any.

I think this is a bit richer as already written here, because it emphasizes a key point about Marshall's personality:

<He returned to New York City as a young man of 15 and was described as being “...of considerable promise, whose reputation has preceded his arrival here.”>

"The contest began with Kramnik winning both of the first two games"

"Both is redundant - "winning the first two games"

"After two more drawn games, on a rest day, Topalov's manager Silvio Danailov, issued a press release which threatened to abort the match"

The use of "more" is wrong as there haven't been any draws yet. The reference to a rest day adds nothing. The last comma is unnecessary.

"After two drawn games, Topalov's manager Silvio Danailov issued a press release which threatened to abort the match."

"Unlike Mr. Kramnik, the World Champion Veselin Topalov..."

I know this is a quote of sorts but where do they get off call Top O' Love the WC? Jess sayin'.

Game Collection: WCC Kramnik-Topalov FIDE Championship 2006

<"The contest began with Kramnik winning both of the first two games"

"Both is redundant - "winning the first two games"

"After two more drawn games, on a rest day, Topalov's manager Silvio Danailov, issued a press release which threatened to abort the match"

The use of "more" is wrong as there haven't been any draws yet. The reference to a rest day adds nothing. The last comma is unnecessary.

"After two drawn games, Topalov's manager Silvio Danailov issued a press release which threatened to abort the match."

"Unlike Mr. Kramnik, the World Champion Veselin Topalov..."

I know this is a quote of sorts but where do they get off call Top O' Love the WC? Jess sayin'.

I second the WCC on the use of "Toiletgate". Not only is it vulgar, it is one of those exaggerated analogies that infests language intended to stir up emotions.>

<Tim>- about your edit:

Much like our webmaster's cabin, LOGGED.

<OhioChessFan: I agree with <Boomie> per the overly long last paragraph in Lasker-Marshall 1907>

Noted and logged sirs.

<3Brooklyn Daily Eagle, 8/4 1903, page 15.

4Ibid, page 15.>

is better than

<3Brooklyn Daily Eagle, 8/4 1903, page 15.

ibid

not

Ibid

With regard to notes 4 and 6 from Game Collection: WCC: Alekhine-Bogoljubov 1934 draft:

Is this <4Neue Wiener Schachzeitung, 1934, page 96>

the same issue as this?

<6Neue Wiener Schachzeitung, April 1934, page 97.>

I have added the new material to <crawfb5's> Game Collection: WCC: Lasker-Marshall 1907 draft, and I think the paragraphs look pretty symmetrical now.

We currently have two draft edits just about ready to submit to Daniel:

Game Collection: WCC: Lasker-Marshall 1907

Game Collection: WCC: Alekhine-Bogoljubov 1934

Both are just under 500 words in length.

I have just been checking a few of the existing WCC intros, and this one here comes in at 570 words: Kramnik-Topalov World Championship Match (2006)

I think we should use 500 words as a "ballpark goal" for length, and I think we should make all of the intros around this length, the availability of relevant information permitting.

I think we should regard each of these events as "important" as any other, at least for our purposes as historians.

Therefore, I think they should all be approximately the same length.

Around 500 words, though some might come in a bit shorter and some (maybe <1948 Tournament>?) a bit longer.

I'd like to close by emphasizing that any of us is super welcome to write a draft(s) eh?

Good find! Scrap page 96, as the report on the 1934 match is on pages 97-98 of the 1934 'Neue Wiener Schachzeitung' (the first pages of the <April> issue).

Furthermore, is there any additional way of changing the font to maybe indicate direct quotations and thereby emphasize them more stongly than simply via ""? Admin manual merely discusses italicizing.

Footnotes:
I would more clearly distinguish them from the text, in brackets (1) and either italicized [[(1)]] or italicized and smaller font [(1)] (preferrred).

Sources: Space between the number and the magazine

If you want he month, then <5Wiener Schachzeitung, 1904, page 364.> was the December issue.

<Washington, DC (Game 9), Baltimore (Game 10), and Memphis (Games 12-14).>

No comma before <and>

In general, no capitalization of terms like <Champion>, <World Champion> or, if referring to specific ones, <Match> and <Tournament>?

Even more nitpicking: No country abbreviations for cities? E. g. there are communities in France called Montreal.