"with" doesn't work. It really needs an -ing word to begin the clause, something like "affirming", "claiming", etc. At first glance, I sort of like the subtle/sassy use of the word "claiming" which seems to work well with the sarcastic usage of "grandmasterly". So,

<OCF>

This suggestion

"A leading contemporaneous chess periodical criticized the quality of the games, claiming that Nardus' sponsorship was the only thing "grandmasterly" about the contest.<12>"

and shall be put into the draft.

<OCF: Terrific.>

What do you mean? The urban dictionary gives

1) <used as a way to describe something delightful. Normally said by annoying girls who think they run it.>

2) <A combination of the words "terrible" and "horrific" in order to sound like you're complimenting a person when really, you think they should go [...].>

3) <To instill with terror.>

<Karpova>

I'm sure that <Ohio> meant the "excellent" meaning of "terrific".

However, the comma is wrong here:

<He won a miniature, after Janowski blundered a piece on move 19.>

Cheese it! It's da Bishop!

Seriously, I see no need for a comma in this sentence:

Please replace

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Lasker got the first move in game 1, which started at 4 pm.<13> The match began with Lasker winning a miniature, after Janowski blundered a piece on move 19.

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with

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The match began at 4 pm with Lasker having the first move.<13> He won a miniature when Janowski blundered a piece on move 19.

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<He won a miniature when Janowski blundered a piece on move 19.>

<Karpova: I want to add that the game ended after 22 moves, not 19.>

The total number of moves seems more important than the move the blunder occurred.

"He won a 22 move miniature when Janowski blundered a piece on move 19."

Or maybe remove the blunder move.

In this case, make it

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The match began at 4 pm with Lasker having the first move.<13> He won a 22 move miniature when Janowski blundered a piece on move 19.

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Tossing out for consideration by the Soviet the thought that the sentence is a bit run onny, and might be better written if it started with "In May 1939".

<They played a second exhibition match<7> in Paris from October to November, which saw Lasker emerge as the clear winner (+7 -1 =2).<8> Shortly afterwards, on 12 Nov 1909, both masters signed an agreement for a title match in autumn 1910, predicated on Lasker not losing his title to Carl Schlechter .<9>>

Effect these changes:

The match began at 4 pm with Lasker having the first move.<13> He won a 22 move miniature when Janowski blundered a piece on the 19th move.

instead of

"Lasker got the first move in game 1, which started at 4 pm.<13> The match began with Lasker winning a miniature, after Janowski blundered a piece on move 19."

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In May 1909, financed by his wealthy patron Leo Nardus, Janowski played an exhibition match against Lasker in Paris, which ended drawn (+2 -2 =0).

instead of

"Financed by his wealthy patron Leo Nardus, in May 1909 Janowski played an exhibition match against Lasker in Paris, which ended drawn (+2 -2 =0)."

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<Again for consideration, are the words "Shortly afterwards" redundant?>

Game Collection: WCC: Lasker-Janowski 1910

Both of your requested changes are now in the mirror:

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The match began at 4 pm with Lasker having the first move.<13> He won a 22 move miniature when Janowski blundered a piece on the 19th move.

"Lasker got the first move in game 1, which started at 4 pm.<13> The match began at 4 pm with Lasker having the first move.<13> He won a 22 move miniature when Janowski blundered a piece on the 19th move."

should look like this:

The part about Janowski's preparation for the Lasker match based on source <2>, was taken over by the WSZ from the 'Algemeen Handelsblad'.

I found the original:

http://kranten.delpher.nl/nl/view/i...

'Algemeen Handelsblad', 3 June 1910, p. 9

the decisive paragraph is the in the 2nd column, right above the game score of the 2nd game.

If we implement it, this would be the new source <10> (the WSZ article had been used at the beginning for the characterization of Janowski as a strong combinational player so it has to stay and can't be simply replaced), so in this paragraph

"Lasker defended his crown in the drawn Lasker - Schlechter World Championship Match (1910) in January and February, and Janowski got his shot at the title in late 1910. Janowski was eager to take revenge and claimed to have studied hundreds of games by Lasker.<2> He had prepared for the match for several weeks in Ostend.<10> The challenger considered Lasker's play to be weak, but the world champion's opponents lost because they tried to cash in on the victory prematurely. Janowski wanted to demonstrate to the world that "Lasker's game was not chess, but dominoes."<2> During their title match, Lasker characterized Janowski in the following way: "Independently he searches for the beautiful, ingenious, deep and hidden. Sadly, he goes too far therein. He pays not the slightest attention to ordinariness. In fact, this gives his play a special appeal, at the same time it is also his weak spot."<11>"

source <2> would become the new source <10> (i. e. the Algemeen Handelsblad):

"Lasker defended his crown in the drawn Lasker - Schlechter World Championship Match (1910) in January and February, and Janowski got his shot at the title in late 1910. Janowski was eager to take revenge and claimed to have studied hundreds of games by Lasker.<10> He had prepared for the match for several weeks in Ostend.<11> The challenger considered Lasker's play to be weak, but the world champion's opponents lost because they tried to cash in on the victory prematurely. Janowski wanted to demonstrate to the world that "Lasker's game was not chess, but dominoes."<10> During their title match, Lasker characterized Janowski in the following way: "Independently he searches for the beautiful, ingenious, deep and hidden. Sadly, he goes too far therein. He pays not the slightest attention to ordinariness. In fact, this gives his play a special appeal, at the same time it is also his weak spot."<12>"

This would at least end the <onward/s> and <afterward/s> controversy. So I will take up <Boomie>'s earlier suggestion.

Following changes:

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change

"From the end of the 19th century onwards, he was a regular participant in strong international tournaments.<1>"

into

From the end of the 19th century, he was a regular participant in strong international tournaments.<1>

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change

"Shortly afterwards, on 12 Nov 1909, both masters signed an agreement for a title match in autumn 1910, predicated on Lasker not losing his title to Carl Schlechter .<9>"

into

I made all the changes you asked for.

I think we should definitely use your new source, but for now I put your entire post right underneath the current draft.

That's fine with me.

On Game Collection: WCC: Lasker-Janowski 1910

I also thought that something like <onwards> was necessary, that's why I had it in there in the first place.

The suggestions with <throughout> and <during> do not fit exactly, as he went on to be invited to strong international tournaments well into the 20th century.

So the most simple is to change it back to how it was before:

please change

"From the end of the 19th century, he was a regular participant in strong international tournaments.<1>"

to

I think it's fine now. I thought it was fine before too, and before that as well.