Ok thanks for clarifying.

Game Collection: WCC: Lasker-Janowski 1910

I put all the notes right next to the punctuation, and put <> around them.

Thanks, it looks fine! Except for

Janowski played for an attack in game <2,14>

which should be

Janowski played for an attack in game 2,<14>

Ok good eye- I fixed that.

I'm wondering if we might start using "game two" and so on, instead of "game 3"?

It looks so much better on the page, especially when a game number appears immediately before a note number.

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<Esteemed Colleagues>

With respect to including more "written out numbers" instead of numerals, here is a case that shows how difficult it might be to improve this, and also how confusing it can look on the page when a numeral instead of a written out number appears:

<By game 22, Bronstein led by a point and needed only to win once more, or draw twice in the last two games, in order to unseat the champion. Botvinnik responded with one of his best games of the match. He describes the final move of game 23, 57. Bg5: >

Problems: Writing out "twenty two" might look a little lugubrious on the page. This is what <Harry Golombek> and <Leonard Barden> do in their match/tournament books. They always write out the full game number no matter what.

But if I leave the game numbers as numerals in this passage, we run up against the extraordinarily ugly construction " game 23, 57. Bg5:"

Game Collection: WCC: Botvinnik-Bronstein 1951

Looks fine to me.

Thanks <Ohio>, I put that in now.

I remember <perfidious> was strongly suggesting a few weeks ago that the "written out numbers" look so much better. I'm going to try to use "written out numbers" where possible.

I do think that "numerals" are preferable in the middle draft chapters on <Match Conditions>, because that's really just a stream of numerical data eh?

As for game numbers, might it be ok for this not to be strictly standardized one way or another?

Maybe not.

And much appreciated.

<<Now he really began to play like a world championship challenger> Eleven words that don't say much. And I don't care for the present tense sense of "Now".>

Might you please try to create a sentence that indicates <Bronstein's> form took a dramatic upturn directly after winning Saltsjöbaden Interzonal (1948)?

His form was so mediocre leading up to the internzonal that if FIDE had chosen three, or even four Soviets to play in it, it's doubtful Bronstein would have been selected.

But upon winning the interzonal, he went on a tear- almost invincible. You can confirm this by looking at the handy list of event results I have posted above the draft there.

What about just writing

Ok what about this, now in the mirror:

"Bronstein's form took a dramatic upturn directly after winning the interzonal. He posted back to back shared firsts in the 16th and 17th USSR Championships, and went on to tie Isaac Boleslavsky for first in the Budapest Candidates (1950)."

"<Bronstein's> form took a dramatic upturn directly after winning the interzonal.">

Quite right. What about this?

"Bronstein's form took a dramatic upturn during and after winning the interzonal. He posted back to back shared firsts in the 16th and 17th USSR championships, and went on to tie Isaac Boleslavsky for first in the Budapest Candidates (1950)."

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or this

"Bronstein's form took a dramatic upturn both during and after winning the interzonal. He posted back to back shared firsts in the 16th and 17th USSR championships, and went on to tie Isaac Boleslavsky for first in the Budapest Candidates (1950)."

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or this

<Bronstein's form took a dramatic upturn>

Brilliant!

I put this one in:

I don't quite like "during" there. It sort of suggests he started out bad and had a sudden surge in the middle of the tournament. But, "in the interzonal" has the problem of the repetition of "in" sounds. Taking it under advisement.

This seems to work well. Is "Interzonal" capitalized? It looks better that way to me.

<USSR championships>

I'm seeing "championships" capitalized elsewhere although not always. I think it looks better this way - <USSR Championships>

No capitalizations. You don't see them in the promoted drafts, and you never will.

That ship sailed a long time ago, what's done is done. Please do not mention the subject again. We are conforming to current style practice in this matter, end of story.

"during" is fine, but could be improved.

"and, after the interzonal," is not fine. It's an unnecessary pause.

What about-